We have a few beta readers, but are looking for some more for LEON’S LAIR.
Here is a description:
LEON’S LAIR is an international thriller, a nail-biting ride that is grisly but somewhat tongue-in-cheek, a brutal tale of horror, and the occult that doesn’t take itself too seriously.
It includes romance, adventure, suspense, an expanse of several countries, and dozens of vivid characters from around the world. However, to say more than the following would give away too many spoilers.
The Jakarta, is an elegant cruise ship sailing the exotic seas in Indonesia with a passenger list of ninety unsuspecting people. Jane and her best friend, Remy, are just getting know the rest of the small group of young twenty-somethings when the ship is attacked by pirates.
However, Leon and his men are not your usual pirates – they want something else besides the usual booty – they are taking female hostages to feed on. They are cruel vampires.
Jane and two male companions escape the horror of what is happening. They take a lifeboat and flee.
They have escaped becoming the victims of Leon and his men, but become lost at sea for weeks, are almost out of fuel, and have nearly lost hope of ever finding rescue when they finally catch sight of land, a dangerous rain-forested island that seems deserted. However, their fight for survival has only just begun.
They are not alone.
Fate is cruel because this island is Leon’s Lair.
Email me at firstname.lastname@example.org.
So those interested in beta reading: (Today is July 29) I would like it back in two weeks, as I have scheduled our professional editor and need time to make revisions based on your feedback first.
I will send a Word doc. If you would turn on “Track Changes” in Review mode, you can make edits. You can also use New Comment in Review Mode, however, the comments come out on the side bar and are hard to see. I think it is better if you make comments as you go right in the manuscript and highlight them in yellow.
Could you keep the following list close by as you read? What we are looking for:
Comments about what you like. (Keeps our morale up and happy about what we wrote, besides knowing what pleases readers.)
What you don’t like and why.
What were some of the emotional impacts and emotional responses a passage evoked with you? Desirable or undesirable response.
What does not quite make sense or seemed implausible (didn’t pull your belief)
Where descriptions of places are difficult to follow
Time line is off.
Are you kept involved and wanting to know what happens next? (In other words, did it keep your attention or did it slow?
Are you involved with the characters? And why? What do you think of them?
Typos if you catch one, but we are not looking for an edit. Our biggest boo boo is leaving out words. And we changed from 1st person to third person and back again in several places, and missed the change in parts. (ie. instead of he, I or I instead of she, etc.)
When you are done, I would like to send you a survey. Some of the questions:
Suggestions over all, if any.
There were some comments with Alpha Readers that it should be two books instead of one. I think that is just a marketing ploy, but what do you think? Is it too long?
Do you like the short introduction of us in the beginning?
Which characters do you like the most? Why?
And the least? Why?
Is it okay if we put your full name in the acknowledgements of the finished book?
Are you also an author. Name of novels.
Over all – how many stars would you give it.
And if you do really liked it, could you write a short review of the book for us?
Thank you. We would feel honored to have your help in presenting the best book we can offer to readers.